Talk:Puhoy

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Puhoy/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:53, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Gen. Quon (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:53, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD:

1. Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done
2. Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done
3. Check for Introductory text:  Done
   • Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done
     • Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... he receives a call from Flame Princess, reaffirming their relationship." (summarised well in the lead)
     • Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Tom Herpich ... Wallace Shawn as Rasheeta." & "The appearance of Finn as an adult was based on Howard Keel's character from the 1954 musical Seven Brides for Seven Brothers, which is a favorite of episode co-storyboarder Wolfhard." (summarised well in the lead)
     • Major Point 3: Reception "It originally aired on Cartoon Network on April 8, 2013." & "The episode was viewed by 2.75 million viewers ... making it the series' first Emmy win." (not a concise summary of the Reception section)
   • Check for Relative emphasis:  Done
     • Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... he receives a call from Flame Princess, reaffirming their relationship." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
     • Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Tom Herpich ... Wallace Shawn as Rasheeta." & "The appearance of Finn as an adult was based on Howard Keel's character from the 1954 musical Seven Brides for Seven Brothers, which is a favorite of episode co-storyboarder Wolfhard." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
     • Major Point 3: Reception "It originally aired on Cartoon Network on April 8, 2013." & "The episode was viewed by 2.75 million viewers ... making it the series' first Emmy win." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
   • Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done
     • Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done
       • "Puhoy" is the sixteenth episode of the fifth season of the American animated television series Adventure Time.
     • Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done
     • Check for Proper names and titles:  Done
     • Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None
     • Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None
     • Check for Pronunciation: None
     • Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done
     • Check for Biographies: NA
     • Check for Organisms: NA
4. Check for Biographies of living persons: NA
5. Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done
   • Check for Non-English titles:
   • Check for Usage in first sentence:
   • Check for Separate section usage:
6. Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done
7. Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

 Done

Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done

1. Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done
   • Check for Headings and sections:  Done
   • Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done
   • Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done
     • Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER)
     • Fix "For his work on the episode, former lead character designer Andy Ristaino won an Emmy Award for "Outstanding Individual Achievement In Animation" for his character designs, making it the series' first Emmy win" in the Reception section.
2. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done
   • Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done
   • Check for Works or publications:  Done
   • Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None
   • Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done
   • Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None
   • Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None
   • Check for Links to sister projects: None
   • Check for Navigation templates:  Done
3. Check for Formatting:  Done
   • Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done
   • Check for Links:  Done
   • Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

 Done

Check for WP:WTW:  Done

1. Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done
   • Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done
   • Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done
   • Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done
   • Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done
   • Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done
   • Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done
2. Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done
   • Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done
   • Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done
   • Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done
   • Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None
3. Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done
   • "badass".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "He might go on a lot of adventures as a kid, but !Adult Finn is badass.")

Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done

1. Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done
   • Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done
   • Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:

None

• Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE):
• Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other GAs)

WP:RS:

 Done

Check for WP:RS:  Done

Cross-checked with other GAs: Adventure Time, Adventure Time (pilot), Adventure Time (season 1), Adventure Time (season 2), Adventure Time (season 3), Adventure Time (season 4), Adventure Time (season 5). Referred one pending FL for rough verification - List of Adventure Time episodes.

1. Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done
   • Is it contentious?: No
   • Does the ref indeed support the material?:
2. Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done
   • Who is the author?:
     • Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios)
     • Nate Cash & Nick Jennings (directors) (Cartoon Network)
     • Herpich, Tom (Tumblr)
     • Muto, Adam (Formspring)
     • Wolfhard, Steve (Tumblr)
     • Ristaino, Andy (Formspring)
     • Kondolojy, Amanda (Zap2it)
     • Walmart
     • Sava, Oliver (The Onion)
     • O'Boyle, Collin (Geek Smash)
     • Frederator
     • Weisman, Jon (Penske Business Media)
   • Does the author have a Wikipedia article?:
   • What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?:
   • What else has the author published?:
   • Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?:
3. Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done
   • • Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios)
     • Nate Cash & Nick Jennings (directors) (Cartoon Network)
     • Tumblr
     • Formspring
     • Tumblr
     • Formspring
     • Zap2it
     • Walmart
     • The Onion
     • (Geek Smash)
     • Frederator
     • Penske Business Media
4. Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

 Done

Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done

1. Check for Direct quotations:  Done
   • "fester" (no inline citation)
   • "supervising director" ... [2] (Check on source 2, inaccessible)
   • "Big thanks to [Wallace Shawn] … who I finally got to cast in the show, thus shortening my bucket list."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "Big thanks to Kent and Pen and Nate, and to secret guest stars J.F., M.S., and last but not least W.S., who I finally got to cast in the show, thus shortening my bucket list. Hope y’all dig it!")
   • "probably my favorite musical".[5] (Check on source 5, successful, "It’s probably my favorite musical, or at least in my top three. It’s genuinely wonderful and it’s so nuts.")
   • "focuses on building character".[9] (Check on source 9, successful, "focuses on building character")
   • "teleport[ing] to … alternate dimension[s]".[9] (Check on source 9, successful, "In that comic, Captain America has been teleported to an alternate dimension ruled by Arnim Zola")
   • "slow down, don't freak out, and communicate."[9] (Check on source 9, successful, "It’s a lesson that all young lovers have to learn at some point: Slow down, don’t freak out, and communicate.")
   • "hilarious" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "it is hilarious (and then touching, all in one episode).")
   • "pretty awesome".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "We get to see Finn as an adult in “Puhoy,” which is pretty awesome.")
   • "Adult Finn" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "He might go on a lot of adventures as a kid, but !Adult Finn is badass.")
   • "pillowy world" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "Finn must come to make a life for himself in this pillowy world, and")
   • "badass".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, as above) (also addressed in WP:F***)
2. Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done
3. Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:

 Done

1. Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done
2. Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done
3. Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

 Done

1. Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources:
   1. Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS:
   2. Check for Out of scope:
2. Check for The range of material that belongs in the article:
   1. Check for All material that is notable is covered:
   2. Check for All material that is referenced is covered:
   3. Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered:
   4. Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge:
   5. Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:

 Done

1. Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH):
2. Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

 Done

4. Fair representation without bias:  Done

1. Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done
2. Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done
3. Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done
4. Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done
5. Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done
6. Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done
7. Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done
8. Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done
9. Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done
10. Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done
11. Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done
12. Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None
13. Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (NFC with valid FUR)

Images:

 Done

6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done

1. Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done
   • Lead Image (Puhoy.jpg): This image is a screenshot of a copyrighted television program or station ID. As such, the copyright for it is most likely owned by the company or corporation that produced it. It is believed that the use of a limited number of web-resolution screenshots (1) for identification and critical commentary on the station ID or program and its contents, and (2) on the English-language Wikipedia, hosted on servers in the United States by the non-profit Wikimedia Foundation, qualifies as fair use under United States copyright law. Other use of this image, on Wikipedia or elsewhere, might be copyright infringement.
2. Check for copyright status:  Done (Non-free content)
3. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  Done (Yes)
4. Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  Done (valid)
   • Source (WP:NFCC#4): "Puhoy", an episode from the fifth season of the animated series Adventure Time.(Screenshot from the TV show)
   • Use in article (WP:NFCC#7): Puhoy
   • Purpose of use in article (WP:NFCC#8): To illustrate the character designs in the episode, which resulted in character designer Andy Ristaino winning the series' first Emmy Award.
   • Replaceable?: No. (Since it's a copyrighted character, there are no free alternatives available.)

6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done

1. Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done
   • Relevant to the article
2. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  Done
   • Appropriate & Representative
3. Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done
   • Caption - An adult Finn, surronded by his pillow family. For his character designs in the episode, Andy Ristaino won the series' first Emmy Award. (succinct and informative, spelling error surronded should be surrounded)

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview and does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
• Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix short paragraph in the Reception section.
• The caption "An adult Finn, surronded by his ..." has a spelling error, surronded should be surrounded.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm delighted to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 22:41, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

How does these edits look? Thanks for the review!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:14, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

It's concise now. Good. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:41, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 03:05, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

--68.199.142.57 (talk) 23:34, 3 June 2014 (UTC) Should this article mention that the plot bears a very strong resemblance to the Star Trek Next Generation episode "The Inner Light": http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Inner_Light_(Star_Trek:_The_Next_Generation)

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If a legitimate source can be found noting the difference, then yes!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 03:24, 4 June 2014 (UTC)

DMT

Why is there no mention of DMT inspiring this episode? I do not see many other possibilities as this mirrors my experiences. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 173.73.27.207 (talk) 20:14, 16 February 2015 (UTC)