Talk:Post-stroke depression/GA1

Latest comment: 1 year ago by IntentionallyDense in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: Just-a-can-of-beans (talk · contribs) 18:40, 18 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: IntentionallyDense (talk · contribs) 19:21, 18 November 2024 (UTC)Reply


A medical GAN that's also a disorder???? My favourite! I'll get around to reviewing this within the next 2-3 days but expect some initial comments at some point today (hopefully). IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 19:21, 18 November 2024 (UTC)Reply

Thank you very much! Just-a-can-of-beans (talk) 19:42, 18 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 21:33, 18 November 2024 (UTC) Reply
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 20:01, 20 November 2024 (UTC) Reply
2c. it contains no original research. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 20:01, 20 November 2024 (UTC) Reply
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 20:01, 20 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 21:33, 18 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 21:33, 18 November 2024 (UTC) Reply
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 21:33, 18 November 2024 (UTC) Reply
7. Overall assessment. On hold until Just-a-can-of-beans can address feedback. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 23:57, 1 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

Failing due to inactivity. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 23:43, 25 December 2024 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

Source review

Prose and depth

  • In the lead I would suggest you include that the symptoms mimic those of depression as well as a bit about diagnosis, epidemiology and outlook (if that is well studied). One sentence for each of those topics should be good. I would also mention that the mechanism isn't fully known as that's the kind of info someone reading the lead may want to know. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • You repeat yourself quite a bit in the signs and symptoms section. Specifically with The severity and symptoms vary from person to person and which may be present in varying severity and number as well as most commonly involve a depressed mood and/or an overall loss of interest or pleasure in activities and 1. Down, sad, or depressed mood 2. Anhedonia (loss of interest or pleasure) I would be fine with you cutting this section to just Symptoms of post-stroke depression are the same as those of major depression.[1] The severity and symptoms vary from person to person, but definitionally and most commonly involve a depressed mood and/or an overall loss of interest or pleasure in activities. but it is up to you. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • though it is commonly underdiagnosed due to overlapping symptoms between stroke and depression could you expand on this? to a layperson I don't really see how the symptoms of stroke and depression overlap although I'm assuming you mean that the recovery from a disorder such as a stroke can be mentally challenging. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • include glutamate toxicity, HPA axis dysfunction, abnormal neurotrophic response, decreased monoamine levels I would spell out the full acronym for HPA in the first time it's used for clarity and wikilink the terms here instead of in the subsections but the wikilink part is more of a nitpick. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • Screening for PSD should be a standard, routine I know that medical literature often gives recommendations but in Wikipedia it sort of looks unneutral. If specific organizations or guidelines suggest this then I'd recommend rewording it to reflect that. Otherwise I'd suggest rewording so it doesn't include "should". IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • It is essential to differentiate PSD from post-stroke apathy (PSA). similar issue to above. Maybe word as "PSA can present similarly to PSD and is at risk for misdiagnosis" or something like that. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • I'm not sure that medication or CBT need to be bolded although that may be a bit of a nitpick. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 03:32, 21 November 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • Pinging Just-a-can-of-beans. If you are unable to respond to some of my feedback within the next 5 days I will have to close this nom as a fail for inactivity which I really don't want to do. IntentionallyDense (Contribs) 22:49, 10 December 2024 (UTC)Reply
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