Talk:Oliver Bjorkstrand

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this! — GhostRiver 18:53, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Might be worth including the IPA pronunciation of his surname (pronunciation guide can be found here
• Delink "Danish" per MOS:OVERLINK  Done

Early life

• Comma after "in Herning, Denmark" per MOS:GEOCOMMA  Done

Playing career

• First three paragraphs should be under a level 3 subhead called "Junior"  Done
• Link the first instances of "goals", "assists", and "points"  Done
• Remove "2012" in "By December 2012", as we know it should be sometime around there based on the prior sentence and the Top Prospects Game  Done
• Link first instance of hat trick  Done
• Period after "with Seth Jones" creates a sentence fragment after  Done
• Link entry-level contract  Done
• Hat trick is sometimes hyphenated, sometimes not  Done
• "50-goal seasons since Dennis Holland in the 1987-88 and 1988-89." → "50-goal season since Dennis Holland from 1987-89" for close para/WP:LIMITED  Done
• " a unanimous selection to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team and was voted by his teammates as the Winterhawks’ Most Valuable Player." → "unanimously selected to the WHL's Western Conference First All-Star Team, while his teammates voted him the Winterhawks' Most Valuable Player." (active voice, fix close para)  Done

Professional

• "Blue Jackets American" → "Blue Jackets' American"  Done
• Link Lake Erie Monsters  Done
• Link 2016 Calder Cup playoffs in the first paragraph ("first Calder Cup playoff appearance") and delink in the second ("Calder Cup Finals")  Done
• Comma after "won the Calder Cup for the Monsters"  Done
• "of making the Blue Jackets' 2016-17 opening night roster"  Done
• Spaces around the ellipses in the Kekalainen quote, per MOS:ELLIPSIS  Done
• Link AHL All-Star Classic  Done
• Link trading deadline  Done
• Comma after "player Roman Polak"  Done
• Comma after "teammate Artemi Panarin"  Done
• Hyphen to en dash for "2018-19 season" and link appropriately  Done
• ""a guy that you can count on in every situation."" → ""a guy that you can count on in every situation"." per MOS:LQ  Done
• The sentence about his three career playoff game-winning goals needs some explanation; we jump from CBJ making the playoffs to that, and I'm not sure what team these GWGs are against
• Link alternate captain  Done

International play

• The link to the Denmark junior team should be in the second sentence, not the third  Done
• Mention that he also made a senior appearance in 2015  Done

Awards and honours

• Reference needed here for Calder Cup MVP  Done

References

• [2] (Rob Mixer) is missing "National Hockey League" in the publisher parameter  Done
• [4] (Columbus Alive), [33] (Columbus Dispatch), and [45] (Toronto Star) should be the work param, not publisher  Done
• Per MOS:ALLCAPS, [7] (Central Scouting), [15] (WHL championship series), [43] (Denmark sweeps), and [47] (Olympic dreams) should be in title case, not all caps  Done
• [39] is different from the rest of the NHL press releases -- it has CBJ as the work and no publisher  Done

General comments

• Photos are properly licensed and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Earwig freaked out a little about the stats. Some WP:LIMITED areas noted above

That's what I've got! Putting on hold for now, feel free to ping me with Q's. — GhostRiver 19:26, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver, so sorry to add to your workload but I seem to have missed the 2020–21 season because of the confusing dates. I am currently expanding it and it will need a review. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 19:00, 28 October 2021 (UTC)

Made a couple of small aesthetic changes on my own, and now I think it looks ready to pass! — GhostRiver 17:50, 6 November 2021 (UTC)