Talk:Niagara Health System

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Clovermoss in topic Raises

Edit Request

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Hello all, my name is Anna and I have a conflict of interest with Niagara Health System. I have been working on a new draft with reliable sources and looking for editors input and assistance on making the changes. The draft has been posted on my user sandbox User:Ancobi/sandbox.

Here is what you will find in my draft:

  • Niagara-on-the-Lake is no longer a site of NH [1]
  • Added other NH locations: Satellite Dialysis Centre in Niagara Falls, Long-Term Care Home in Welland, Mental Health and Addictions at 264 Welland Ave., St. Catharines

My draft doesn't include the sentence about Deb Matthews announcing the closure of 5 hospitals out of 6. The information is inaccurate, the Welland Site will remain open and the location and type of services is still being determined.[2]

Another thing to note about my draft is that it doesn't include the Controversies section. My reasoning for this is that the sources that support the information no longer exist.

I have provided multiple sources that are reliable and support my changes. I'm looking forward to your feedback.  Preceding unsigned comment added by Ancobi (talkcontribs) 17:38, 26 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 26-AUG-2019

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  Unable to review  

  1. You've placed edit suggestions in two different locations: your draft version and this talk page. Please place all of your proposals in one central location for review, either in the draft, or on the talk page.
  2. The COI editor is reminded of the need to sign all talk page posts using four tildes (⇧ Shift+~ x4).
  3. When ready to proceed with the requested information placed in one location, kindly post a new {{request edit}} template below this post. Thank you!

Regards,  Spintendo  02:02, 27 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 28-AUG-2019 - Suggested Draft

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Thanks for the reply and I apologize for having my edits in two different places. I have added my draft below for your review.

Thank you! --Ancobi (talk) 18:59, 28 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 28-AUG-2019

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  Edit request declined  

  1. Thank you for providing the requested information in one central location. It is much appreciated.
  2. Unfortunately, your edit request cannot be approved because text from your proposal has been found to be insufficiently paraphrased from the source material.
  3. All additions to an article need to be placed using an editor's own words and phrases, per WP:CLOSEPARAPHRASE.
  4. Kindly redraft your edit request, taking care to place all phrases taken from sources into your own words. Please feel free to re-submit that edit request at your earliest convenience.

Regards,  Spintendo  20:11, 28 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 30-AUG-2019

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I made some changes to the draft based on your feedback. I added two references to support the Niagara Health stats. I appreciate your help on editing my draft. Thank you.

--Ancobi (talk) 13:01, 30 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Edit request reply 30-AUG-2019

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Thank you for your work at rephrasing the information, it is much appreciated. However, the rephrased portions of text are still strongly influenced by information which already exists on the Health System's own websites. Only a cursory attempt was made to rearrainge the main basic parts of information, as shown below:

This closeness in sentence structure and phrasing still closely parallels the information as it already exists at the Health System's website. It is not Wikipedia's purpose to mirror information which already exists. If there is difficulty in reproducing this information (primarily because the Health System's website already does a competent job of describing these relationships) then the only information brought over should be the minimum needed to convey the narrative. This ought to be done in an original way for the reader's benefit. This may be as simple as reproducing a timeline:

1999Direction by OHSRC to amalgamate
1999Shaver Hospital and Niagra Rehab Centre merged with Hotel Dieu and RH of St. Joseph, renamed HDSHRC
2005HDHSH merged with NH

Or if you prefer, it may be as complex as highlighting past and current relationships in a chart showing their structural relatedness:[a]

Either way which is chosen would make fine additions to the article and would not sacrifice either the information being delivered or the manner in which it is delivered (by plagiarizing the source).

  • With regards to the intro lead section, a ref tag has been placed immediately after the name of the organization. Ref tags are not normally placed in the lead section.
  • With regards to the list of facilities, only a few have been given ref tags. It is also unclear if the proposal means for this list of facilities to be placed in the lead section. It would be better placed elsewhere.
  • The History section describes "new services" offered at certain facilities. The question of whether current hospital services should be described at all in Wikipedia pages notwithstanding, the use of a term such as "new" is discouraged per MOS:RELTIME.
  • With regards to the controversy section, the reason given for the proposed deletion was that the sources no longer exist. As the sources still exist under new URL's, that reason is unacceptable.[b]
  • In conclusion, kindly reformulate your edit request so that it makes use of the strategies and suggestions listed above, and feel free to resubmit that edit request at your earliest convenience. Regards,  Spintendo  07:35, 31 August 2019 (UTC)Reply

Notes

  1. The relationships shown in this chart are approximations meant as an example, and may not accurately depict the actual relationships involved.
  2. The Report Toward Equality and Access: Realigning Ontario’s Approach to Small and Rural Hospitals to Serve Public Values is located here. Information on the Niagara Health System Medical Staff Association vote of no confidence may be found here. Information on the Ontario Nursing Association's censure of Niagra may be found here. All three of these references have been updated in the article.

Inquiry re Niagara Health System content

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Good morning. I am the Communications Director at Niagara Health and hoping to connect with you regarding the content about the organization. We are concerned that it lists outdated information that could impact access and use of health services by members of the public in our community. For example, we no longer have a site in Niagara-on-the-Lake, and changes to sites announced in 2014 are no longer accurate. It would be appreciated if you could clarify for me how we go about updating the information in a way that appropriately meets your guidelines. We have attempted several times to make changes, and even information that is currently on your site is being rejected. Thank you in advance for your help with this important matter.

Ancobi (talk) 15:40, 4 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

I find it strange that changes, such as updates like the ones you described, are being rejected. What are the changes you want to make? I see that the Niagara Health website does omit the NOTL site now, so I will try deleting it. Hopefully that works. Trappy (talk) 18:01, 4 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
Hi Trappy. I listed below the changes I'm proposing. I broke it down in sections instead of providing you with the entire article.

Please let me know if you need any further information. --Ancobi (talk) 20:23, 19 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

References

  1. "New centre brings addiction, mental health services 'out of the shadows'". April 15, 2019.
  2. "Annual Report - One Team. One Purpose". Niagara Health. Retrieved 19 September 2019.
  3. "A new chapter of care begins". Mar 24, 2013. Retrieved 19 September 2019.
  4. "NOTL buys former hospital for $3.5 million". Mar 21, 2017. Retrieved 19 September 2019.

Edit Request

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I'm looking to get some information updated on the Niagara Health System article page. The changes I'm purposing are broken down in four sections with referrences.

Please let me know if you need any further information. --Ancobi (talk) 13:21, 7 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 8-OCT-2019

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Below you will see where proposals from your request have been quoted with reviewer decisions and feedback inserted underneath, either accepting, declining or otherwise commenting upon your proposal(s). Please read the enclosed notes within the proposal review section below for information on each request.  Spintendo  16:12, 8 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply December 2, 2019

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Thank you for making some of the changes. I noticed it says that Niagara Health has 8 sites, that is incorrect. Niagara Health has 5 hospital sites and 3 community-based locations. I'm proposing the following change to the first paragraph:

The Niagara Health System, or Niagara Health (NH) is a multi-site hospital organization, comprised of five sites and three community-based locations, a long-term care home in Welland, a satellite dialysis centre in Niagara Falls and a shared location with Canadian Mental Health Association in St. Catharines for mental health and addictions programming. Niagara Health serves over 450,000 residents across the 12 municipalities making up the Regional Municipality of Niagara, Canada.


Under Facilities, can we change Mental Health and Addictions to Mental Health and Addictions at 264 Welland Ave., St. Catharines The address is the name of the building.

Thank you. --Ancobi (talk) 18:56, 2 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

Requesting Updates

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I'm looking to update a couple of areas on this article. I noticed it says that Niagara Health has 8 sites, that is incorrect. Niagara Health has 5 hospital sites and 3 community-based locations. I'm proposing the following change to the first paragraph:

The Niagara Health System, or Niagara Health (NH) is a multi-site hospital organization, comprised of five sites and three community-based locations, a long-term care home in Welland, a satellite dialysis centre in Niagara Falls and a shared location with Canadian Mental Health Association in St. Catharines for mental health and addictions programming. Niagara Health serves over 450,000 residents across the 12 municipalities making up the Regional Municipality of Niagara, Canada.


Under Facilities, can we change Mental Health and Addictions to Mental Health and Addictions at 264 Welland Ave., St. Catharines The address is the name of the building.

Thank you. --Ancobi (talk) 16:35, 24 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 24-DEC-2019

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  Clarification requested  

  • It isn't clear what is meant by the term "community based-location" and how a hospital doesn't fit into that term, so much so that the two separate items need to be dinstinctly mentioned. By my math, 5 hospital sites + 3 community based sites = 8 sites altogether. Please advise, keeping in mind that the nomenclature preferred by NHS may or may not be entirely the same as used by Wikipedia. When the two conflict, it's usually the case that Wikipedia's nomenclature is preferred — which invariably is whatever name or description is used by the majority of independent, reliable sources when discussing said term. Regards,  Spintendo  18:15, 24 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

Reply 20-01-2020

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The community-based services are referral only and the way they are listed currently on the Wikipedia page is confusing for some members of the public who may think they can go directly to one of those sites for care. The Long-term car site in Welland is part of the hospital building and technically not an additional site.

Can we change the first sentence in the article to reflect the five hospital sites: The Niagara Health System, or Niagara Health (NH) is a multi-site hospital amalgamation, comprising five sites serving over 450,000 residents across the 12 municipalities making up the Regional Municipality of Niagara, Canada.

Please let me know if you require any more information. Thank you. --Ancobi (talk) 19:38, 20 January 2020 (UTC)Reply

Request edit to one sentence

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Hi, I'm looking for help to make the following changes to Niagara Health System article.

In the first sentence, is it possible to make the following edit to reflect the five hospital sites:

The Niagara Health System, or Niagara Health (NH) is a multi-site hospital amalgamation, comprising five sites serving over 450,000 residents across the 12 municipalities making up the Regional Municipality of Niagara, Canada.

The reason why I would liked this changed is because, Niagara Health has only 5 hospital sites [1]. The community-based services listed under the Facilities section (Satellite Dialysis Centre in Niagara Falls; Long-Term Care Home in Welland; Mental Health and Addictions) are referral only and saying that Niagara Health has eight hospital sites on the article could be confusing for some members of the public who may think they can go directly to one of those locations for care. The Long-term car site in Welland is part of the hospital building and technically not an additional site.

Please let me know if you require any more information. Thank you. --Ancobi (talk) 18:42, 10 February 2020 (UTC)Reply

References

  1. "Niagara Health About page". www.niagarahealth.on.ca. Retrieved 10 February 2020.

Reply 10-FEB-2020

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✅  Edit request implemented    Spintendo  20:51, 10 February 2020 (UTC)Reply

Raises

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Came across this source. Leaving a note here for future me to use it somewhere in the article. Clovermoss🍀 (talk) 06:35, 25 January 2025 (UTC)Reply