Talk:Lux (Doctor Who)/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: TheDoctorWho (talk · contribs) 04:22, 3 May 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk · contribs) 03:58, 14 May 2025 (UTC)

Hey, I really enjoyed reviewing The Well so I am going to review this as well! Expect comments by the end of the week :D DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 03:58, 14 May 2025 (UTC)

Hey, sorry for the delay, I have been very very busy and tired. Well done on this article - it is so interesting! I found the filming bit to be the most interesting. I cannot see any major issues and earwig shows no copyright issues. I have several comments/suggestions - I am not trying to be picky or mean at all, these are just things I did not understand and I imagine that other readers may also struggle with, so I wanted to note these per WP:READERSFIRST. I also made a few minor changes too.

Review:

Lead - no issues spotted. I merged the first two paragraphs as I felt that they were quite small.

Plot:

1.) "who disappeared from the cinema" - would recommend changing to "disappeared whilst at the cinema" to make it clear that they disappeared when there rather than just being an employee etc who worked there that disappeared

2.) Is there any way you can clarify "the embodiment of Lux Imperator"?

3.) "is responsible" for what?

4.) "They flee to another false reality" - Is there any way to explain what the other "false reality" is? Is it inside the cinema?

5.) "challenges them" - How?

6.) "until he becomes one with the universe" - Is it possible to reword or explain this? I found it difficult to understand

Development and production design:

1.) "and racism, in which Davies said he added to address issues in present-day society" - Is it possible to reword this sentence (I don't think it is the correct wording) and potentially expand on the issues of the present day?

2.) "Examples of racism and segregation" - I slightly reworded this bit to make it flow better, I hope it is okay

3.) "Other motifs in the episode present explore grief, hope, friendship, and sadness" - Is it possible to slightly expand on this?

4.) Can you please briefly explain how Davies broke the fourth wall?

5.) Can you please say who Anita is?

6.) "three different wigs were considered for Sethu to wear" - Did she end up wearing the three wigs?

7.) "Following this instance, such an idea was considered quasi-canon" - Can you please explain what this mean? Which instance and who considered it quasi-canon?

8.) "This scene raised suspicion that Davies had potentially been planting spoilers online himself regarding upcoming episodes as well as rumours that the series would enter into another hiatus. It was also theorized that these leaks could be part of a larger marketing campaign" - I am a bit confused - which leaks are these referring to? And which scene is this referring to? Who theorized and who was suspicious that Davies had been planting spoilers online? I found this bit to be quite confusing as I did not understand what it was referring to and it seemed unconnected to the previous sentence so if you could potentially explain that would really help readers. I also was a bit confused whether this was referring to the fans in the episode or the real world fans.

9.) "stated that the episode had the same "kind of mind-bending prediction you'd expect from The Simpsons"" - Who stated?

Filming and post-production:

1.) Can you briefly explain or link what "period theatre sign" is?

2.) Which type of "vehicles" were added? 1950 American cards?

3.) Is there any information on how Cumming voiced his scenes? Did he do them independently at home or at a studio in New York etc?

Ratings - is it possible to explain what "consolidated figures" are?

Critical reception:

1.) There are quite a few instances of "highlighted" - could you potentially change a couple? E.g. "Will Salmon, writing for GamesRadar+, praised..."

2.) "felt the Doctor's optimistic way of handling it "can't help but scrape awkwardly against our real-world knowledge." - I am quite confused by this - could you potentially expand briefly on this for clarity?

3.) "it quickly became "strained"" - Is there any way to briefly explain on why she felt it became strained?

In print - Is there a way to reduce the whitespace?

Sources - Could you please archive the remaining sources (e.g. Sources #16 and #17)

When these are addressed I will do a source spotcheck and hopefully pass this article. Please let me know if you have any questions at all or need any assistance. Well done on your work so far! :) DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 04:08, 21 May 2025 (UTC)

@DaniloDaysOfOurLives: I have fixed most of these issues, by providing additional clarification where possible. There were just a few cases where it seemed that it didn't quite seem possible. For example, with "the embodiment of Lux Imperator, God of Light": this is saying that the God of Light has taken on an embodied form called Lux Imperator, or with "period theatre sign": theatre sign is a compound noun and period is an adjective meaning "belonging to or characteristic of a past historical time, especially in style or design". Just to explain the leaks/spoilers a bit more one a bit more, the final two paragraphs of the development section are both discussing the same topic, the meta-scene. The "leaks" are aforementioned spoilers that were suspected of being planted in that same paragraph. I have tried to patch those paragraphs up in places. Any of the other few lacking expansion are from lack of further elaboration in the source itself. I believe that everything else should be addressed. TheDoctorWho (talk) 07:45, 21 May 2025 (UTC)

Hey, thank you so much for your changes – they are great! And thank you for your explanation – I understand that it's not always possible to clarify and I appreciate you trying. I have spotchecked Sources #1, #5, #10, #18, #34 and #41 and I am going to pass this article, well done! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 08:30, 21 May 2025 (UTC)

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