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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. |
- There she remained until where? On the run? In the UK?
Y
- Who was Captain Edwards? He is introduced without explanation.
Y
- Same sentence, the grammar doesn't really work, there is something missing.
- Davidson was apparently the acting captain for this voyage; the sources don't really provide anything else about him. I'm rather at a loss on how to rephrase as I can't see anything wrong with the sentence. I suppose that I could move up mention of him and his role as commodore to the lead sentence of the paragraph, but inserting that info seems to add more problems than it solves. Any suggestions?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:58, 1 December 2014 (UTC)Reply
- suggest After taking fire from the light cruiser SMS Dresden and the armoured cruiser SMS Gneisenau, her commander Captain Edwards ordered Otranto out of line, away from the Germans. Otranto then headed west at her best speed as she had no value against the German cruisers. Glasgow was the only other British ship to survive the battle.
- link Valparaiso
Y
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
- a few overlinks, Australia, bridge, amidships and Belfast.
Y
- 1600 should be 16:00
Y
- suggest use of template:circa for the laid down field, rather than a ?
Y
- suggest the fact that the passengers were American troops be included in the lead
Y
- Lifeboats and Officer of the Deck seem to be inappropriately capitalised
Y
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| 2. Verifiable with no original research: |
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). |
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2c. it contains no original research. |
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| 3. Broad in its coverage: |
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. |
no issues |
| 6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: |
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. |
- the licensing on the two images aren't quite right. The infobox one doesn't have an author, so how we know it was taken by the UK govt is beyond me. The second one looks ok, but the licensing needs to point to collections.rmg.co.uk/collections/objects/20460.html rather than Flickr, because the RMG is the real source. Suggest asking Nikki for assistance on the infobox one.
- The infobox photo is from the Imperial War Museum, on which copyright has lapsed world-wide. Corrected source for the 1909 image, although I've swapped them around to match the chronology better.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:58, 30 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
- Then the licence is incorrect, because there is no evidence it was published prior to 1964. Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 02:12, 30 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
- None needed as it falls under "It is a photograph created by the United Kingdom Government and taken prior to 1 June 1957" Without an identified photographer, we must assume that it was taken by a RN photographer, as a donated photo would have a photographer identified. IWM photos have been used with this exact same level of sourcing in FA-class articles many, many times.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:59, 30 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. |
good coverage of civil and naval service, captions ok |
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7. Overall assessment. |
On hold for seven days for remaining points to be addressed Passing, all criteria now met.
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