Talk:Gunbuster/GA1

GA review

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Nominator: Z. Patterson (talk · contribs) 21:40, 18 May 2025 (UTC)

Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 17:11, 2 August 2025 (UTC)

When I saw this nominated in May, I decided to step up for the review.

Let's go with any issue:

• I would suggest to balance the lead by making the two paragraphs similar in terms of length per WP:Lead like an intro what was the critical response.
  • I have three paragraphs of similar length. Z. Patterson (talk) 00:25, 4 August 2025 (UTC)
• The first sentence is kinda long.
  • Done. Z. Patterson (talk) 12:21, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• The lead needs an intro to the plot. For example if I were writing the Gundam article I would say "The series focuses on a young man named Amuro Ray..."
  • Done. Z. Patterson (talk) 12:21, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• No reference for the Japanese voice actors?
  • Done. Z. Patterson (talk) 21:16, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• I would suggest to rename Outline to Production, creation or development.
  • Done Z. Patterson (talk) 12:21, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• Music. Any notable information about the composer? I suggest using Darker than Black as a model.
  • I specified who Kohei Tanaka, the composer, is. Z. Patterson (talk) 19:37, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• Plot and episodes seem a bit late considering the arrange of section. I would suggest moving the episode summaries to a plot section.
  • Done. I moved the summaries of the plots of each episode to the Plot section. Z. Patterson (talk) 18:45, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• Cosplay seems more fitting for reception but then again cosplay is common in general. I suggest just leaving the outstanding cosplay like Hiroshi Matsuyama cosplaying as Naruto Uzumaki or Ann Kao cosplaying as Frieren
  • Done. Z. Patterson (talk) 12:53, 3 August 2025 (UTC)
• Reception needs an introduction sentence while the Super Robot Wars mention could either be in reception since it's part of the legacy or as a part of the video games.
  • Done. Z. Patterson (talk) 00:25, 4 August 2025 (UTC)
• Also, I suggest toning down some repetitive sentences structures like "In month/year"
  • I removed or changed some instances of "In month/year" to make the article flow more easily. Z. Patterson (talk) 12:21, 3 August 2025 (UTC)

Other than that the article looks good. I'll pass it once you revise these issuesTintor2 (talk) 17:11, 2 August 2025 (UTC)

@Tintor2: As I believe I will be doing this in multiple edit sessions, I will be marking tasks off as I go. I will let you know when I am completely done as a reply to this message. Z. Patterson (talk) 12:19, 3 August 2025 (UTC)

Good. Don't worry about a timelimit. The usage of an episode list with summaries is kinda troublesome since it clashes with the infobox unless the viewer is using a mobile phone. Tried mixing the episode summaries with plot while toning down the length of the process. I had the same demand when writing Darker Than Black: Gaiden which was divided in 4 episodes. Tintor2 (talk) 16:24, 3 August 2025 (UTC)

@Tintor2: I might refer to Neon Genesis Evangelion and Nadia: The Secret of Blue Water as examples for the plot outline. Z. Patterson (talk) 18:28, 3 August 2025 (UTC)

Perfect. One last thing. Is it possible to tone down the plot's length? It's six episodes of each 28 minutes so some parts might be considered minor kinda like when you trimmed Nezuko Kamado. Tintor2 (talk) 21:48, 3 August 2025 (UTC)

@Tintor2: I attempted to make the changes you suggested and trim the plot per MOS:PLOT. Z. Patterson (talk) 01:53, 4 August 2025 (UTC)

Good work. I've just revised the sources. Passed the article. Curiously, are you interested in editing more of Anno's works like you did with Rei and now Gunbuster? Happy editing. Tintor2 (talk) 02:53, 4 August 2025 (UTC)

Thank you. Possibly. Z. Patterson (talk) 09:18, 4 August 2025 (UTC)