Talk:Fate/Hollow Ataraxia

Clarification

This article sorta 'jumps around', Someone needs to clarify how all the servants are present, etc.

Names

The whole Shirou/Avenger thing looks really, really messy. Might I suggest changing it? (Ie: Use only one name) Mirioki 15:15, 26 April 2006 (UTC)

Quality

I think the majority of this article needs to be rewritten, not for content, but for phrasing and organization. Most of the stuff is poorly written and appears to just be copy and pasted from somewhere else.

The BIG problem

All right, the big problem with the Ataraxia page is that the spoilers are ALL on the main page... which means one thing... We need to make character and synopsis pages and move the spoilers into respective character pages...
By the way, is this copy pasted from the Moonlit World website? If so then... ugh... not again... Oh well, Moonlit World seems to be the only reference for non-japanese speakers, but it's a pity that we have to depend on that site for information... Mirioki 23:35, 4 May 2006 (UTC)

Cleanup & Wikification

I will try to fix, wikify, clean-up and re-furnish this entry. I've added a better introduction, more details in the infobox, and will try to re-write and clean the plot summary and character info later. - Ganryuu 15:30, 10 May 2006 (UTC)

I will not be touching this article until FSN itself is finished; this is a bloody mess in and of itself and to tackle this on too...meh, I'll probably lose interest before I even try. Terek 05:20, 11 May 2006 (UTC)

Maybe you'll have more vested interest once someone tries to clean it up more... like my pathetic attempts in the FSN page. And yes, this is a mess... Mirioki 05:27, 11 May 2006 (UTC)

Haha, remember the "Berserker>Shirou" picture that Beast's Lair complained about? Well, to be vocal on a related issue, should we really have a topic in the FHA table of contents entitled, "Shirou dies again"?! Terek 20:55, 13 May 2006 (UTC)

I agree that it's a bit out of place, but lets leave those details for later. I suppose that the first thing this clusterfuck needs is being made look more like the FSN page, so how about creating separate pages for each character with a small introduction in the main article, and then putting the plot summary in a separate article as with the FSN Scenarios? I'm willing to do this, not right now, but I can go at it little by little. Ephyon 16:38, 18 May 2006 (UTC)

3 years later... fail much? There should be a mention about what Fate/Stay Night is before anyone feels that they should to click on a redirect link on the article to learn more about the franchise. The media section could be covered later, moreover you guys should use other class A-C Anime articles as reference. Contributions/65.94.30.173 (talk) 19:35, 15 June 2009 (UTC)

Link with paths of the original game

This video (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rEqAdGjGsxY) seems to suggest that this game has some link with the Heaven's Feel path of the original game. From 0:14 - 0:24 you can clearly see it stated and the video does seem to be official. Anyone know what that's about? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.187.251.54 (talk) 01:16, 5 January 2009 (UTC)

Translation?

Is there a translation patch anywhere in the works? 78.149.85.96 (talk) 20:19, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Year and a half response... but yes, people are working on a patch. Progress can be tracked here http://vps.k-link.net/entrans/main.php. 68.255.107.81 (talk) 05:26, 10 October 2010 (UTC)

Article has become incomprehensible, and not just because of the plot of the topic

I know this visual novel / sequel has a plot full of twists and turns, but the addition of a bunch of jargon-packed, run-on sentences have made it impossible for the article to suit its purpose. It reads like complete nonsense at parts. If you have interest in the topic, please work to address the issue. ComicsAreJustAllRight (talk) 19:46, 17 November 2020 (UTC)

Is't it Hollow ataraxia?

Why the move? (And an inconsistent capitalisation on the page?) Smeagol 17 (talk) 14:23, 12 May 2026 (UTC)

GA review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Fate/Hollow Ataraxia/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Veyhola (talk · contribs) 18:30, 3 April 2026 (UTC)

Reviewer: A412 (talk · contribs) 05:46, 5 June 2026 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this. ~ A412 ^talk! 05:46, 5 June 2026 (UTC)

@Veyhola I finished the review, but this needs a lot of work to reach GA. I've seen you work quickly before, so I won't fail it, but fair warning. ~ A412 ^talk! 05:55, 7 June 2026 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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References

Spotcheck

• [5] - including a Hanafuda card game, "Operation Illya's Castle" - The source text does not verify this, and it does not appear to be in the video either.
• [8] - Fate/Hollow Ataraxia was released as an adult game on October 28, 2005, as a limited-edition version, playable on Windows PCs as a DVD - is cited to [8] and [18]. [8] does not appear to verify any of the information here, and [18] only verifies that it was a 2005 PC game. Neither source verifies that it was an adult game, a limited edition, or a DVD.
• [10] - Fine.
• [13]
  • merge the routes of Fate/stay night into a "cohesive" story - cannot find this information in the source.
  • including Aramoto Kei, Hikaru Sakurai, and Morisaki Ryouto - cannot find this information in the source.
• [19] - and as a bonus came bundled with the visual novel's original soundtrack - I don't see how this database entry that shows the soundtrack exists verifies this information
• [24] - Fine.
• [31] - Fate/hollow ataraxia Anthology Comic was released between January 30, 2006, and May 25, 2007, in nine tankōbon volumes under their Magi-Cu Comics imprint - Source does not verify this information, it's a link to a single comic's product page.

Images

• Infobox: fine, fair use
• Gameplay: fine, fair use. See my comment below in prose review though.
• City: fine, CC-BY-SA
• Second cover art: Problematic per MOS:VGCOVERART. We should not include cover art of less notable releases, and should not include it in the body.
• Manga: fine, fair use

Prose

Lead

• Type-Moon released a version of the game without erotic content, with a PlayStation Vita port in November 2014 - was this version only for PSVita, or also for Windows? If the latter, were they both released in 2014?
• adult game Fate/stay night for mature audiences - what does for mature audiences modify here?
• The game was introduced primarily as a fan-disc intended to deliver a more "happier" follow-up to Fate/stay night that allowed the characters to coexist peacefully after the "tragic" events of the original visual novel - Quoting single words looks like MOS:SCAREQUOTE. Suggestion: The game was introduced primarily as a fan-disc intended to deliver a happier follow-up to Fate/stay night that allowed the characters to coexist peacefully after the events of the original
• which offers different scenarios with courses of interaction - unclear what this means
• The game ranked as one of the top selling visual novels for the time of its release - vague, suggestion: The game was the second-best-selling visual novel of 2005

Gameplay

• General note: the article doesn't explain what the gameplay is: it says it abandons the traditional linear gameplay and route-based system but doesn't say what it is instead. What are players doing moment-to-moment? Is it, like the first game, a game that requires minimal interaction from players where players come to a decision point where they are given a chance to choose from options displayed on the screen? Is it an adventure game as the series article says? If it is, what does that involve?
• Image: is the minigame displayed part of the core gameplay? If not, should we choose a screenshot of the core gameplay instead?
• marked by "!" - without a visual this is meaningless
• flags are retained across loops - what are flags?

Plot

• She and Avenger set off to compete and win the Holy Grail War - slightly ungrammatical, compete doesn't take a direct object. compete in?
• He realizes that Bazett and him - him is ungrammatical. he and Bazett?

Development

• The first half of the first paragraph here is a really confusing read. Is it a spin-off? A sequel? A pseudo-sequel? A fan disc? I'd lead with a clear Fate/hollow ataraxia is a <descriptor> to Fate/stay night.
• Are Meteo Hoshizora, Aramoto Kei, Hikaru Sakurai, and Morisaki Ryouto the same as the sub-writers who aided with daily writing and editing?
• The manufacturing of the original adult version had since then been suspended - Move up one sentence to keep in chronological order

Manga

• This is confusing. Did the various publishers really name different anthologies identical titles? I don't know how to make this more readable. Maybe a table?

Reception

• This is a very thin reception section, it's just sales data. Critical reception is a borderline required section for video games. Is there really none? This game had two re-releases, surely between the three releases there was critical reception.

• @Veyhola: In case you didn't see the comments above. Z1720 (talk) 01:59, 15 June 2026 (UTC)

  Fixing Veyhola (talk) 21:44, 18 June 2026 (UTC)

  @Veyhola I apologize, but it's been two weeks, and the 2a (spotcheck verifications) and 3a (missing critical reception) issues are still outstanding. ~ A412 ^talk! 16:29, 24 June 2026 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.