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A fact from Cryptooology appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 23 January2022(check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
Did you know... that according to one critic, the math rock album Cryptooology by Yowie "sounds like an explosion in a Slinky factory"?
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... that according to one critic, the math rock album Cryptooology by Yowie "sounds like an explosion in a Slinky factory"? Source: "Still on the two guitars and a drumkit tip, the antipodean Yowie serve up Cryptooology (Skin Graft), which sounds like an explosion in a Slinky factory." Clare, Andrew (December 2004 – January 2005). "Asterisks by Moonlight". Plan B. No.3. p.61 – via the Internet Archive.
Overall thoughts: this is a well-written article; I like the prose and appreciate the background information on the band. A few comments below.
Some neutrality issues with these superlatives in wikivoice: meticulous rehearsal and are in fact painstakingly precise in the lead; meticulously composing in Recording and release. I'd attribute them as opinions (perhaps something as simple as "have been described as" instead of "are in fact", assuming a source uses "painstakingly") and/or use a more neutral descriptor.
Removed or reworded some of the unecessary superlatives
The lead seems a bit short; can it be expanded a little?
Expanded on the lead a little. According to MOS:LEADLENGTH, an article with fewer than 15,000 characters prose should have one to two paragraphs in the lead, and Cryptooology has just under 8,000
Composition: is there a reason "clean" is in quotes? (I'm not really familiar with "clean" amplification; just wanted to check if it's a technical term or a quote from the source.)
I was wondering the same thing. Typically when I see the word clean in reference to music, I think "no distortion" (which in this case is true). However, I can't 100% confirm if that's what the critic is talking about in the reference, so I just got rid of "clean" altogether (the sentence still works).
Carl W. Stalling—who is best known for scoring cartoons like Looney Tunes and Merrie Melodies – I think this needs a source.
Added a source
I'd try to paraphrase a couple of the longer quotes in Reception; the one from Levinson seems a bit long.