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Titleless citation of Moscow Times

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I was going to try to fix the broken citation at the end of the Healthcare firsts section; the bit about helping organise a petition to Yeltsin in October 1992. Unfortunately I wasn't able to find anything even vaguely resembling an archive of of the Moscow Times online, but then I don't speak Russian so there are probably better places to look than Google (shocking, I know).

I did, however, run across a few stories which indicate the date in the citation might be a typo; it might be October 31st, like the preceding citation. The reason for suspecting this is that Boris Yeltsin was a little busy on the 13th of October, 1992 in regards to a small matter of withdrawing Russian troops from Lithuania as part of the dismantling of the USSR. Meanwhile over in the USA, that day saw the Vice Presidential debate between Dan Quayle and Al Gore; that may have touched on abortion issues, but I'm not enough of a masochist to find archives of the thing. Besides, it's not like there's any question of who was hopelessly out of his depth in that meeting of minds. --BenM (talk) 08:29, 18 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

Found References

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I have been asked to see if I can straighten out the entry for Merle Hoffman and take out the problems that have shown on her entry.

This is the edit I created. I do work as an outside consultant to Choices Women's Medical Center, which she founded. I did find articles that referenced the Open Letter to Boris Yeltsin that were causing issues in the listing. They are hard copies that did not exist online so we have placed scans and PDF's of these online and referenced them. Does this help that issue? I have tried to cite more referenced material as well. I hope this meets your approval. If there is anything I can do, please let me know.

Sincerely, Mark D Phillips

Markdphillips (talk) 16:52, 17 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi Markdphillips, thanks for your edit request. I've collapsed the article into a box to make the talk page easier to read. I'll have a look at this and get back to you. st170etalk 02:18, 30 December 2016 (UTC)Reply
☒ Not done yet I've had a look at the above for you and I've included a few comments after each of the first few paragraphs (before Careers). In recognition and awards, you need to restructure this because it sounds rather promotional. Be careful with your wording. I also note that you have a few primary sources, please try and use independent sources as these are much better. Phrases like she was an 'early, outspoken critic' - this could be interpreted to be subjective. Rather, include sources to back these up or make them sound more neutral. Have a read through your article again and remove anything that sounds as if it would only do good in a CV/resume. This includes 'being extensively interviewed'. If a claim is backed up by a primary source, then I would recommend you to remove it or else find another source. You use a lot of weasel words like 'acclaimed' - these should be removed to comply with WP:NPOV. What I would recommend is to split this article up into sections and I'll review by section to make it easier for us all.
When you resubmit this, remember to activate the template again or ping me. st170etalk 02:35, 30 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

New Edit of Merle Hoffman based on your requests

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Markdphillips (talk) 18:34, 30 January 2017 (UTC)Reply

Pinging St170e on your behalf, since he mentioned it in the section above. jd22292 (Jalen D. Folf) (talk) 00:23, 1 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
In progress Hi Markdphillips, apologies for the delay in responding to this edit request. I'll review this now. I've also collapsed your edit request to make the talk page more navigable. st170e 17:01, 27 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
Partly done This draft is better than the previously proposed draft. I'm not implementing the edits in full, though. I've gone through this section by section and compared it to the current draft and judged whether the edits were an improvement or not:
Introduction - The current introduction is not written from a neutral point of view so I've copied your introduction into the article with the exception of the first line. I've kept the first sentence from the current article because it reads better - your proposal for the first line is awkwardly worded and it would be better to keep it as it is.
Personal life - I've used entirely your version but named it 'Early life'.
Recognition and awards - I've removed some sentences about her addressing conferences; I'm not entirely surely this is notable for inclusion. I'd argue it's clutching at straws for recognition.
Political activism - removed the section about her being profiled by Forbes and being 'interviewed extensively' - this isn't notable for inclusion.
Healthcare firsts - I've put quotation marks around "firsts" (keeping in line with the non-edited version of the article) and removed the section which described her Congress efforts as 'instrumental' - this doesn't keep in line with WP:NPOV.
Grammar - I've corrected a few things and de-capitalised certain sections.
I've implemented your draft in full other than the changes I've outlined above. Have a look at the article and let me know if it's fine. If you don't agree with any of my changes, let me know below. All the best, st170e 17:21, 27 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
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